College Essay Final

John Hopkins University Prompt

John Hopkins university was founded in 1876 on a spirit of exploration and discovery. As a result students can pursue a multi dimensional undergraduate experience both in and outside of the classroom. Given the opportunities at Hopkins please discuss your current interest- Academic or extracurricular pursuits, personal passions, summer experiences, etc.- and how you will build upon them here. 

Honolulu Hekili from Hawaii vs. Northern California Tri-valley, Bottom of the 7th inning and the game is tied. This is the semi-final match of the 2014 Babe Ruth Pacific Southwest tournament in Surprise, Arizona, this determines who goes to the Championship game. I, Kaz Tachino, am on 3rd base with 1 out. There is no possible way that we can lose, we worked way too hard to get here, and we WILL win this game. There was just a huge flame burning in my heart. Our chances of winning have increased and everyone is on their feet. The pitcher makes a mistake and I score home. As I run down the basepath, my yelling has been heard around the world. My hands were red from all the clapping I had done from the excitement of the game. My teammates mobbed me at home plate, whacking the top of my helmet. We were going to the championships, but it was special because we got to play in a Major League Baseball Spring Training field. Also. the winner of this game would go to the Babe Ruth World Series. Would we be able to make it their, and persevere through the 100 degree weather? I guess you'll just have to keep reading then.

A rematch, Hekili vs. Tri-valley was bound to happen. Sure enough, we had to play those guys again. The score was 9-3 in the Top of the 7th. A ground ball to the second basemen, "OUT!" 3 outs, the game was over, and one of the teams were getting a trip to Ocala, Florida. Our moms and dads were jumping for joy because we were going to the World Series. Parents and players were busting out their cell phones and cameras to take videos and send home to our family members. "WE DID IT." Our dreams that we had since we were small kids playing tee-ball finally came true. It's what every baseball player longs for. Other teams would do dog piles and scream, but our team wasn't a bunch of show-offs. We had pride, and were very modest. That's just how we were raised and brought up as baseball players. I liked that mindset, though, because it shows that we deserve it, and that we weren't cocky. Showing up the other team just wasn't our thing. Anyway, there's no where to go after this, this is where the best teams of the nation come to play. Every singe one of us posted a picture on Instagram and how happy we were. Friends and families were commenting and congratulating us on our HUGE victory. We were all pooped out and just felt like lying on the field and relaxing. "World Series, HERE WE COME!" 

If you ever thought that Hawaii was always sunny and hot compared to the mainland (other 48 states not including Alaska), you are terribly wrong. Florida was terrible because most of the time it was about 90% humidity. As soon as you step out of the airport, you instantly start to sweat. But when you're into the game, that's the last thing you worry about. Anyways, going to the World Series was a blast, you get to meet the best players from around the country. There were people over 6 feet tall. It looked like they could bench 3,000 pounds because they were so huge. The experience of meeting all the different teams was unbelievable. They had different attitudes, and ways to play the game. They had different accents from where they come from, too. But did this affect the way that we played against them?

Honolulu Hekili, the only team to go UNDEFEATED in Pool Play. We were the team to beat, everyone else loss in the tournament, besides us. As our coach says, "the targets are right on your guy's backs, and everyone is aiming for you." It was true, everyone wanted to beat us. It all came down to a special game, the semi-finals. We were scheduled to play a team from Texas. There was a very interesting start, however. We had a very late game, 8:00 P.M. Once both teams were done warming up, lightning and thunder joined the party. The game got delayed for a whole hour. It felt special because the word "Hekili" means thunder or lightning. Texas was a very skilled team. They threw hard, made all the plays, and hit hard. One guy hit a homerun over the fence, which was 335 feet away. That same flame that burned earlier was even bigger in my heart. I was willing to risk anything to win. I would get beaned by a 100 mph pitch just to win this game. But, not everything will go your way. As you probably guessed, we did lose to them. But, just because we loss, doesn't mean that we didn't play our hearts out. Each and everyone of us put 200% effort into the game. Sometimes losses can't be helped if you tried your best. Tears were running down our face after the game because of how far we came, and that the dream was finally over. This game of baseball just puts us all in tears, our love for the game is just incredible. All the time and effort we put into baseball truly played off, and we don't regret anything at all. I felt sad, but also proud of the excellent work we had done. A summer filled baseball is exciting and worth everything.

Passion is the key word to my summer. My passion for baseball is just overwhelming because I just love playing, watching, and analyzing the game. I would put in work everyday to play the game. But, I don't only put passion into baseball, but into everything I do. Especially school work because education comes before baseball. Sports is a reward for paying attention in school, and doing your work. At John Hopkins University, I will put in 200% effort into my work, just like I do for baseball. I don't just do work to get it done, I do it because I want to. I will do quality work because I know I will benefit everything in the future. Passion is the key word. I hope you enjoyed reading my essay and recommend me into John Hopkins University. You will not regret anything if I am accepted!

Word Choice Olympic

1. The children raced to their beloved father who had finally returned from being deployed. Tears of joy rushed down their faces as all three of their arms wrapped around their father. An attitude of gratitude is what they had because he has served the country and showed his love for our nation. With his patriotic uniform, and his proud smile, he then squeezed his three daughters for he hasn't seen them in 2 years. He replays the video chats he had with them when he was away, but realizes that when they're standing right in front of him, he can hug them. He then tells them, "lets go home."

2. The gun was shaking due to the quivering hands of the lady. She held the gun up to a thief that was stealing money from the bank. More focused than ever, the lady tried to aim at the bandit who was holding a hostage in his arms. Tears dripping down the hostage's face. The lady held her breath for a moment to perfect her shot. She needed to aim directly at the man, so she wouldn't hit the hostage. The trigger was pulled and the lady hit the target. She finally completed her aim training.

3. "I believe that we will win, I believe that we will win!" The USA fans cheered their hearts out for their beach volleyball representatives in the 2012 Summer Olympics in London. It was the 3rd set and the score was 24-24. Both sides' hearts were beating 1,000 times per minute. US served the ball over the net, the other team returns it. A constant loop replays for both teams were greatly skilled and experienced. US returns the ball and the girl from the other team trips and falls. Shouts from the US team and fans echoed throughout London. The winning team leaped in the air in joy because this was the first time they had won since the year 1,900.

4. Bottom of the 9th inning, 2 outs, the score is 0-0 and Buster Posey, the catcher for the Giants, is up to bat. "A high, inside pitch to Posey... and GONE, THAT BALL IS OUT OF HERE! You can put in on the boooooooooooooard, yes!" The crowd raises to their feet at the instant sound of the crack of the bat. The ball was deep over the fence, in to the third deck of the stands. Posey trots around the bases pounding his chest. Tossing his helmet into the air, he screams as he gets mobbed at home plate. His teammates ripped his jersey into pieces, for they knew that they made baseball history. The giants have won the 2012 world series, and the last time they won was 1954. The team was jumping up and down in excitement, they knew they were the underdogs, but they never gave up.

5. The student slowly fell into a deep sleep. The boring math class was no wake up call. Every second of the class felt like hours and hours. Each hour eating away at your brain. His eyelids grew heavier and heavier. His sight became very feint, and soon enough he became unconscious, down for the count, asleep. Then suddenly a screeching "PAK" woke the boy. It was from the ruler that smacked down on his desk. The boy then got detention for sleeping in class.

College Essay

John Hopkins University Prompt

John Hopkins university was founded in 1876 on a spirit of exploration and discovery. As a result students can pursue a multi dimensional undergraduate experience both in and outside of the classroom. Given the opportunities at Hopkins please discuss your current interest- Academic or extracurricular pursuits, personal passions, summer experiences, etc.- and how you will build upon them here. 



Honolulu Hekili from Hawaii vs. Northern California Tri-valley, Bottom of the 7th inning and the game is tied. This is the semi-final match of the 2014 Babe Ruth Pacific Southwest tournament in Surprise, Arizona, this determines who goes to the Championship game. I, Kaz Tachino, am on 3rd base with 1 out. Our chances of winning have increased and everyone is on their feet. The pitcher makes a mistake and I score home. As I run down the basepath, my yelling has been heard around the world. My hands were red from all the clapping I had done from the excitement of the game. My teammates mobbed me at home plate, whacking the top of my helmet. We were going to the championships, but it was special because we got to play in a Major League Baseball Spring Training field. Also. the winner of this game would go to the Babe Ruth World Series. Would we be able to make it their, and persevere through the 100 degree weather? I guess you'll just have to keep reading then.


A rematch, Hekili vs. Tri-valley was bound to happen. Sure enough, we had to play those guys again. The score was 9-3 in the Top of the 7th. A ground ball to the second basemen, "OUT!" 3 outs, the game was over, and one of the teams were getting a trip to Ocala, Florida. Our moms and dads were jumping for joy because we were going to the World Series. Parents and players were busting out their cell phones and cameras to take videos and send home to our family members. "WE DID IT." Our dreams that we had since we were small kids playing tee-ball finally came true. It's what every baseball player longs for. There's no where to go after this, this is where the best teams of the nation come to play. Every singe one of us posted a picture on Instagram and how happy we were. Friends and families were commenting and congratulating us on our HUGE victory. We were all pooped out and just felt like lying on the field and relaxing. "World Series, HERE WE COME!" 


If you ever thought that Hawaii was always sunny and hot compared to the mainland (other 48 states not including Alaska), you are terribly wrong. Florida was terrible because most of the time it was about 90% humidity. As soon as you step out of the airport, you instantly start to sweat. But when you're into the game, that's the last thing you worry about. Anyways, going to the World Series was a blast, you get to meet the best players from around the country. There were people over 6 feet tall. It looked like they could bench 3,000 pounds because they were so huge. The experience of meeting all the different teams was unbelievable. They had different attitudes, and ways to play the game. They had different accents from where they come from, too. But did this affect the way that we played against them?

Honolulu Hekili, the only team to go UNDEFEATED in Pool Play. We were the team to beat, everyone else loss in the tournament, besides us. As our coach says, "the targets are right on your guy's backs, and everyone is aiming for you." It was true, everyone wanted to beat us. It all came down to a special game, the semi-finals. We were scheduled to play a team from Texas. There was a very interesting start, however. We had a very late game, 8:00 P.M. Once both teams were done warming up, lightning and thunder joined the party. The game got delayed for a whole hour. It felt special because the word "Hekili" means thunder or lightning. Texas was a very skilled team. They threw hard, made all the plays, and hit hard. One guy hit a homerun over the fence, which was 335 feet away. As you probably guessed, we did lose to them. But, just because we loss, doesn't mean that we didn't play our hearts out. Each and everyone of us put 200% effort into the game. Sometimes losses can't be helped if you tried your best. Tears were running down our face after the game because of how far we came, and that the dream was finally over. This game of baseball just puts us all in tears, our love for the game is just incredible. All the time and effort we put into baseball truly played off, and we don't regret anything at all. A summer filled baseball is exciting and worth everything.

Passion is the key word to my summer. My passion for baseball is just overwhelming because I just love playing, watching, and analyzing the game. I would put in work everyday to play the game. But, I don't only put passion into baseball, but into everything I do. Especially school work because education comes before baseball. Sports is a reward for paying attention in school, and doing your work. At John Hopkins University, I will put in 200% effort into my work, just like I do for baseball. I don't just do work to get it done, I do it because I want to. I will do quality work because I know I will benefit everything in the future. Passion is the key word. I hope you enjoyed reading my essay and recommend me into John Hopkins University. You will not regret anything if I am accepted!

Coming of Age Graphic Draft

College Essay Prompts

Harvard

-unusual circumstances in your life
-travel or living experiences in other experiences in your life
-a list of books you have read during the past twelve past months
-how you hope to use your college education
-an intellectual experience that has meant the most to you
What you would want your future college roommate to know about you

University of Hawaii

1. Commitment or volunteer service- complete an essay describing what activities you participated in (i.e. Any activities including volunteer, leadership, membership and community services in social, school or community organizations which demonstrate your willingness to give back to your community).

2. Commitment to health care- complete an essay describing what activities related to health care that you participated in (I.e. Demonstrated commitment to health care, volunteer work, employment in health services, enrolled in a degree program in any area of health fields; career goals and plans in the health care field regardless of are of study; how you intend to impact the health of your community in the state of Hawaii.)


John Hopkins university


John Hopkins university was founded in 1876 on a spirit of exploration and discovery. As a result students can pursue a multi dimensional undergraduate experience both in and outside of the classroom. Given the opportunities at Hopkins please discuss your current interest- Academic or extracurricular pursuits, personal passions, summer experiences, etc.- and how you will build upon them here.

Coming of Age Final Draft

It was a cold weekday morning, I woke up at about 6:00 to eat breakfast and get ready for school. I was thinking that it would be the usual, eat, get ready, and go to school. I didn't tell my family "good morning" or that kinda stuff because we saw each other everyday. As I walked into our family room, I asked my grandma, "where's mom?" She responded gently, "something bad happened to Kai, so mom and dad drove him to the hospital 2:00 this morning." I didn't know what to say, this isn't the first time it happened, but I was too young the other time. If it was something minor like a broken arm, then I wouldn't really worry that much, but this is a major problem to worry about. When he was 6, he had a medical issue called Wilms’ Tumor, which is a kind kidney cancer. I was finally old enough to realize that someone's life was at stake, my own brother's. My grandma said that his stomach was feeling very sore and unusual, so they rushed him to the hospital. I was only in 5th grade, so I was very worried and didn't know what to say. I still had to go through school before I could visit him.

Going through the school day was a terrible feeling. I was still in Elementary school, I should be having a great time because all the work is easy, and you get to play around all day. That was not the case. I had a queasy feeling in my stomach the whole day. Each class period was wasted. All I did was stare off into space, thinking about my brother. I felt bad that through most of my life, I barely talked to him about how everything is. I wasn't close to him that much. Even my oldest brother talked to him very little, and they slept in the same room. My heart had one-thousand beats per minute. I never had this type of feeling before, I felt confused and worried at the same time. 

It was finally 2:10, the time that my school finished. I quickly walked to the front of the school, we weren’t allowed to run. My grandma picked my brother and I up, and we drove to Kapiolani Hospital. As I walked in to the building, it had that hospital smell, which was like hand sanitizer. Chills were running down my body as I walked into my brother’s room.

The sight was disastrous, there were tubes going in his body. I felt like I was going to faint when I saw all the nasty guck being sucked out of his body. I was worried sick for him, I didn’t know if he was going to be okay or not. I was speechless. I didn’t know if it was right to ask my mom if he was going to die, but I was just too anxious. “He’s not gonna die, he’s gonna be fine.” I felt a sense of relief, but just the point of him being in the hospital worried me.

After the two months that my brother was in the hospital, he finally got out. He was happy because he hated hospital food and lying down in bed all day. Although he was not too excited for all the school work he had to catch up on. I learned a big lesson from this family incident. My mom now talks about it all the time. She says that we should never stay mad at anyone because you don’t want your last memory of them being angry, or making them sad. You’ll live your life in regret and sadness. What this incident did was help to make my family closer to each other, especially with my older brother. We realized that we should cherish each moment, because someone’s life could end at any moment. I try not to stay mad at anyone for a long time. I learned to love life, and live without any regrets.

Now, all my brothers are closer. Before, we just use to argue. We weren’t brothers, we were just people that were related to each other. It turns out that we all have a lot in common. My brothers now come into my room just to hangout. My two older brothers talk a lot now, and they agree to kick me out of their room because I annoy them. We do stuff for each other and just enjoy each other’s company. I like the way things are now, we fight and argue, but in the end, everything goes back to normal. Our family is just that much closer now. If this never happened, I don’t know what our family would be like. I’m sad that my brother got hurt, but I’m glad that our family is now closer than ever. The most important lessons are learned through bad experiences.