There
is a common controversy of Hawaii being the perfect paradise, but is it really
how it seems. Over the years there were many cases of graffiti. This is a loss
for both the taggers, and the government because it cost money to paint over,
too. There really is no point in trying to stop them. Out of Hawaii’s
imperfections, graffiti is an issue that make the islands no the “perfect
place” everyone thinks it is.
Graffiti
is very unappealing to everyone, especially the tourists that come to Hawaii.
According to The Honolulu Star Advertiser, “Spray-painted scrawl is ever
present on walls, utility boxes, signs, etc.” When tourists come to Hawaii,
they expect to see the beautiful beaches, and nice towns, not graffiti on
buildings. It also looks very rundown, which makes them realize that we are
just like them. Graffiti is a persistent problem to government and private
property owners. These property owners are the ones that pay for the damage. If
the building belongs to a business, then it could lower the amount of consumers
due to the visual garbage. For all the hard work they have to put in to get rid
of the graffiti, they could lose money, and people lose their job. This visual
garbage in very unpleasant to the eye, and can repel people.
These
people that vandalize are reckless and love to graffiti. In the star
advertiser, it says that the police arrests taggers, but are still encouraged.
This is what they do, and this is their hobby. They aren’t going to stop
because they just love to graffiti. This is the way they express themselves
through art. Plus, they probably enjoy how angry the police get. Star
advertiser quotes, “Several groups are fighting paint with paint.” Not only
does this affect the groups, but it also affects our environment. The groups
don’t realize that if they paint over it, then the taggers are going to paint
over that, too. Then more paint fumes will be in the air, constantly hurting
our environment. These taggers are
enjoying the anger that groups have because they paint on their property five
hours after they just painted over it. They don’t care about what people think,
they are just doing their thing.
Through
all these graffiti problems, the government and police must be enraged by this
madness. There were 1111 graffiti cases and 227 arrests in 2005. This doesn’t
make Hawaii look like a better place. If mainlanders knew this, then they
wouldn’t want to tour here, which could drop our economy. The tourists are the
ones that we get money from, and we need Hawaii to look clean. Little kids
think that graffiti is cool because it’s very colorful, but if they are
influenced to vandalize, then there will be more problems. It costs $5211 for
replacing signs on the H-1 freeway. There should be a special place where
taggers could put their art so that it doesn’t affect any other people.
Otherwise, they would just keep spray-painting on the signs, and causing more
trouble. The angered government should do something about this.
Graffiti
is unappealing to the eye, cost lost of money, and taggers just won’t quit.
Tourists should rethink their idea of Hawaii being the perfect paradise. It’s
not just beautiful beaches, but nasty graffiti. The government should do
something and stop this madness. As for the tourists, they shouldn’t move here
either, due to the fact that Hawaii isn’t so perfect. And if they move here, it
would cause even more trouble.
this draft states many different facts which is really good! One thing you can change is making ur essay a little more interesting
ReplyDeleteYour draft overall is good. The only thing I saw that needs to be fixed is adding more reasoning to follow the chunky paragraph format.
ReplyDeleteWhen you say "It also looks very rundown" You are missing the point. To some it might ut to ther it is art & to some it might not look unproffesional or far from perfect, but every body has a side. Taggers arent enjoyin fighting the police back beacause it makes them mad. They do this beacause they arent seeing the message. They put this art work to share a message. Not to anger the police. Yes, they should do it to building that allow it. They ahve areas to do it at but they want people to see it. Put it somewhere every body can see it without having to get it approved. In the last SE paragraph your last sentence is against what your whole paragraph is about. Yes one paragraph should be about how the 'taggers' feel but dont mix opinons in a paragrapgh.
ReplyDelete~Mikayla and yes I know lots of grammar wrong with my comment.
YOU SHOULD TRY TO CLASSIFY/DEFINE WHAT GRAFFITI ACTUALLY IS BECAUSE THERE ARE LOTS OF PEOPLE LIKE MIKAYLA THAT MIGHT SAY WELL WHAT ABOUT THE "GRAFFITI" THAT IS ACTUALLY NICE AND IS ARTWORK ON DISPLAY. BECAUSE THERE IS A WHOLE SECTION OF DOWNTOWN DEDICATED TO GRAFFITI. SO TRY TO CLARIFY SO THAT PEOPLE KNOW WHAT EXACTLY YOU ARE TALKING ABOUT. MS(3)
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